Professor Scott's Feedback

I just got Professor Scott's feedback concerning my essay.

I really liked how the feedback started out positive and then transitioned into what I need to work on during the revision process. She positively commented on my introduction, which I really tried to make personal but also informative in this essay. Her positive feedback encouraged me to try that strategy again in future essays.

I thought the criticism was fair and constructive. In high school, my English teachers would write all over my essays, telling me that this and that was written poorly and needed to be changed. Their comments would leave me confused as to why those problem areas needed to be changed and how I could go about doing it. I thought it was very helpful that Professor Scott included suggestions to help me revise areas that could use some improvement. She also noted how those problem areas left her feeling as a reader, whether it be confused, deceived, etc. I'm glad I have her feedback and after re-reading those problem sections, I can now see why she feels that way. I'll definitely be using her revision suggestions.

In future writing, I'll be sure to try and avoid doing what I did wrong in this essay. I'll try to keep each body paragraph balanced and make an effort to keep including transitions that aren't too blunt but keep the writing organized. ( I was really conscious of that in this essay).